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Government should put tax on unhealthy food to promote better health. Do you agree or disagree?

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Since recent times are witnessing a considerable
consumption
 of
junk
food
, it is a matter of grave concern that healthy
food
 could be promoted by imposing higher governmental taxes on fast
food
. I agree with the above statement owing to various reasons.
To begin
 with, higher taxes imposed on
junk
food
 would reduce its
consumption
. The people
would
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would, therefore
therefore
, be subject to cook and eat
the healthy
Suggestion
healthier
food
 at home. The middle and below- middle class people who cannot afford
expensive unhealthy
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expensive, unhealthy
food
 would reduce
purchasing
Suggestion
purchases
 of it. They would consume it
on only special
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only on special
 occasions
such
 as ceremonies, parties and festivals.
This
 can be exemplified by a research that the sales of
junk
food
 four times greater in festival seasons rather than ordinary days.
Thus
,
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,
 higher taxes are helpful in reducing the
consumption
 of unhealthy
food
 items.
In addition
, the money collected from
junk
food
 taxes could be used to promote
the healthy
Suggestion
healthier
the health
food
 and to aware people about
harmful consequences
Suggestion
the harmful consequences
 of unhealthy
food
. In order that, tax money should be used to make healthy
food
 more easily available at reasonable
prices which
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prices, which
 would encourage people to eat healthy
food
.
Moreover
, debates, publications and seminars could be organised by
government
Suggestion
the government
 to aware people about detrimental effects
such
 as high blood pressure, obesity and other health hazards.
As a result
, people would depart themselves from
junk
food
 items. To conclude
,
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,
although
 it is difficult to stop people from consuming
junk
food
completely but
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completely, but
completed but
complete but
completing but
 given the
affordmation
a statement asserting the existence or the truth of something
affirmation
 views
,
Accept space
,
 it is apparent that the higher taxes on
junk
food
 may reduce its
consumption
 to a significant level and encourage people to take healthy
food
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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