Some believe that the best way to stay fit is to join a gym or health club and voiding stress ,give your own opinion.

Health
is a great gift from God. We have to save it and protect ourselves from illnesses. Almost people around the world try to be fit with a good
health
,
furthermore there
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furthermore, there
are
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is
a great deal of ways to be healthy
person
such
as following a
diet
, getting
exercise
and avoiding any
stress
. Nowadays, in My country, we try to give up the sedentary life and be healthy people through many ways.
First
of all, many people follow a
diet
and eat healthy Food
.
Accept space
.
For instance
, I have known some friends are vegans and others are omnivores. As well as both of them control on their intakes
,
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,
so they are healthy people. In my opinion, our government plays a vital role to raise awareness through
health
campaigns which encourage people to follow a
diet
and lose their extra weight. Personally, after giving birth of my girl I put on weight and I decided to lose it.
However
, I achieved my goal,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
struggled with following a
diet
.
Secondly
, getting a lot of
exercise
is an influential way to keep in shape and be a healthy
person
. In
this
years
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year
and age, almost adults in Egypt go to
gym
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the gym
at least three times per week. They work out a long time by using many equipment. From my point of view, not only adults or
elderly
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the elderly
have to get
exercise but
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exercise, but
also
the children have to play any sports which they prefer to be healthy. Many parents in Egypt motivate their children to play sports
in particular
aquatic sports because it helps children to concentrate more and be fit. As well as, playing any sports or exercises prevent the chronic diseases in the future. There is a famous quote relates to
this
topic is “preventing is better than cure". So we have to get
check
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checked
up regularly to catch any diseases early and to be
health
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healthier
healthy
people. I assume the government play prominent role regarding to
this
issue by saving
health
insurance for every citizen.
Also
, avoiding
stress
is an essential factor to be
health
Suggestion
a healthy person
healthy person
the healthy person
person
. As we know the life became faster than before and the majority of people have
stress
in their work.
On the other hand
, we need to rest our
mind
Suggestion
minds
and charge our batteries by doing meditations or getting
holiday
Suggestion
a holiday
. To sum it up, we have to change our lifestyle and follow a
diet
which is suitable for us plus getting
exercise
as much as possible. Avoiding
stress
is a good way
also
to be
healthy
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a healthy person
the healthy person
person
.
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