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Many people nowadays travel abroad for their university education. Why do people do this? Would you consider doing this yourself and why? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience

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Studying in an abroad country has become fashion now. With each passing day there is augment in the people going foreign for higher studies.
This
 essay will discuss why people choose to go abroad and provide evidence if I get a chance what are the reasons I will be going out the country for studies. To start with, studying in an international country has numerous benefits as it leads to a better prospective and career development.
For instance
, in foreign countries, people get hand to hand training which makes them experienced even before they graduate from university which ultimately leads to better job after graduating. Not
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 having a foreign degree opened various path for the students even after they go back to their respective countries they can easily get high rated jobs or even can do their own business.
Therefore
, people travel a long way for the studying as
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 study benefit them in the long run for their future career. Another advantage we share values and learn others culture and heritage and sometime even a new language.
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, at foreign universities there are people from all over the world which makes us learn their respective culture and language. Not
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 it makes the person independent and they learn how to manage their own things and balance their life.
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, it is good for overall development of one's personality. At
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, if I get a chance to go to my high education I will definitely go as I want to do mu business in future. To conclude, though it's not easy to live alone, but for a better future and learn new things and to become independent one must never miss the opportunity for going abroad for studying.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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