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Some people agree with spending lots of money on a large wedding, while others think it is a waste of money. What is your opinion?

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There is no doubt that a wedding is an initial step
to begin
 the relationship between husband and wife.
Accordingly
, some people consider it beneficial to spend too much amount on
such
 events. I would agree with those who argue that
this
 is a complete waste of their savings. Considering the positives
first
, wedding ceremonies might be the best way to establish connections with people out of touch.
This
 is because people usually meet regularly with their close relatives and friends, but could not spare time to meet other people involved in their lives. The argument goes that, if there is no concept of celebrations, people will be isolated from their cultural heritage and more importantly values of relationships.
However
,
such
 events do not generate revenue or have any impact to improve the financial capability, the amount spent is not recoverable. To illustrate, in South Asian countries, wedding events are considered a symbol of pride, and people are forced to spend their life savings and face poverty afterward. That said, the outcome of spending money on social parties is not measurable.
In contrast
, financing students would equip our workforce with qualified professionals, leading to a more competitive society, than funding wedding ceremonies.
Similarly
, if one travels around the world to establish contact, share ideas and cultural methodologies with foreigners,
this
 would be more beneficial than local gatherings, which can be placed in less expensive places
such
 as cafes or parks.
This
 will ensure that our
next
 generation is left with enough financial resources to enough to combat serious issues
such
 as homelessness, which were left unresolved, especially in the developing world. In conclusion,
although
 social events allow people to record their best memories and set a good example in their society, we must remember that the spending on these events must not supersede our priorities for educational or business opportunities, hopefully leading to an absence of problems
such
 as bankruptcy or poverty in the worst cases.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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