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Some people say that cars are the best to use in cities while others think that bicycle are better. Discuss both sides and give your opinion?

#people #cars #cities #bicycle
Once overseas
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
 come to a country for their visit and have to pay with a higher cost for travel conveniences, they feel they are being discriminated against;
that is
, they will not come back for relaxing activities. In
this
 case, the host country would suffer from the great loss of income stemming from
this
 non-smoke industry, whereby many people will become unemployed when tourism is perceived as contributing to economic development. To take Thailand as a shining example,
this
 land is referred to as the paradise of
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
,
moreover
, it has gained significant achievement in
this
 vital field thanks to providing all kinds of tourist services with reasonable prices for both local people and foreign ones.
Conversely
, some people are of the view that domestic persons have a right to different forms of travel and pay a lower cost for the following rationales. For the initial reason, local people have paid taxes for the government so that their country has enough money for preserving historic buildings or cultural heritage, and it is better if the leaders know how to encourage more and more people to enjoy tourism activities via having a decrease in fees for tickets to the poor and students so as to help them have more opportunities to grasp traditional and cultural features and to have a better insight of the preservation of
such
 treasures. To avoid the feeling of discrimination, discounts
in
Suggestion
on
 traditional and historical festivals and events or domestic people will be a great help.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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