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Although countries with long average working hours are economically successful, this often has some negative social consequences. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the recent decades, the ongoing persistent debates, where they assume that long working hours make the country economically stronger than others. I believe that extended working period only comes with myriad health ailments, which would be explored in my upcoming paragraph. To commence with, lengthening the working hours of the employees has not the effective way to escalate the mass production of the
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, mostly the workers with overtime come across numerous health issues like
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 pressure lead to hypertension or heart disease, these are silent health problems but basically responsible for early retirement or premature mortality.
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, prolonging the time, might disturb the relationships of the individuals as they struggle to find leisure time for their friends and family, even for themselves too, the
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 absence of quality time in life may affect the person psychologically like feeling more depressed,
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, to incline the economical graph of the nation, the companies ought to follow different strategies like furnished the projects with advanced technology like electronic machinery, which reduce the pressure or boost the accuracy of the
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. In the industrial sectors, most of the 70 percent
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 done by the technology.
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, no need for extensive working hours. To recapitulate above arguments, it's negative approach are overpowering the favourable aspects. I believe success and achievement only comes when the worker are physically or mentally strong, which cannot be possible by increasing working hours.
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