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A lot of money is spent on repairing old buildings. Instead of repairing old buildings that money should be spent on knocking down old buildings and build new ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, many people have different perspective about protecting old constructions. Some people believe that the government should not be wasted money on
fixing historic
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fixing, historic
 constructions
on the other hand
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 others think that the government should be
spent
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spending
 more money on historic buildings. In my opinion, I agree with the idea of consuming on fixing old buildings. I will examine some reasons to support my ideas.
To begin
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 with, having historic buildings is an area is
matter
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a matter
 of pride and people of
such
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 area can easily describe their hometown and locality to people of other parts of
country
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the country
.
Moreover
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, it is good for people who work in
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history
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historic
 industry or enjoy in
history
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. It can entertain them
also
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 it is good for children for learning about their
history
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 and we may be beneficial for historians at their studies.
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, historic constructions are the heritage of their nation. Another reason is that it can be beneficial for the growth of
economic
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economies
economy
 in
country
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the country
. Take an example, the prominent and popular historic buildings which are famous among national and international would make the country more popular aspect of economic due to the majority of tourists.
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, To sum up, in my opinion, knowing a
history
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 is an essential for citizens and we cannot build up the future without knowing the
history
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. I agree with the idea of the government spending money on fixing historic buildings.
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