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In many places, new homes are needed, but only spaces available for building them in the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

#places #homes #spaces #countryside
Although
 many locations need to have houses which are new and for
this
 matter, there are not any area except in the suburbia, some people have the opinion that building in the countryside is not a good choice and they should preserve them originally. Personally, I believe that
this
 occurrence can cause many difficulties in the environment and I partially agree with
this
 notion. It is true that the number of people has increased in recent years and the majority of cities have become more congested and polluted. In fact, authorities should make a comprehensive scheme in order to control the number of population and
also
 consider many homes for
next
 generations to prevent of affairs which lead the inhabitants to homelessness. I think that governments can build new homes in the suburb of the cities due to fact that the space of cities has finished, and
this
 area is only in the countryside with a good climate where people can experience the beauty of nature.
Furthermore through
Accept comma addition
Furthermore, through
 theses development villages will be progress and
also
this
 method can reduce the volume of air pollution and traffic jams in the cities.
On the other hand
, construction new homes can cause irreparable blemishes in surroundings and
this
 issue has several demerits for farmers and gardeners.
In other Words
, I think that the majority of these people lose their jobs due to the fact that all gardens and plantations are located in the countrysides and without right urban planning, we will confront a lot of trouble in terms of production of fruits and other things. What is more,
this
 matter can cause climate alteration because building deteriorate plateau, river, and so on. In conclusion, in my view building in the suburbs can be advantageous on condition that the authorities have a good plan for that with the least damage to the environment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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