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The government should allocate more funding to teaching sciences rather than other subjects in order for a country to develop and progress. To what extent do you agree?

#government #sciences #subjects #country #progress
Science plays an important role in the development of the country in ways of various new inventions and some people are in the
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opinion
 of extensive grants towards it.
However
, I believe only allocating more funds for science and giving less importance to other subjects would hamper the growth of the nation as well as standard of living. Science is very interesting and
major chunk
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a major chunk
major chunks
 of our medical, environmental, technical
problems etc
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problems, etc.
problems etc.
 are
resolve
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resolved
 with
help
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the help
 of it. Scientists perform various research in the medical field to invent
cure
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cures
 for various dreadful diseases present in the world
such
 as the current pandemic Covid19. To find the alternate solution for environment degrading substances like using of ethanol or electric energy
instead
 of petrol. Allowing funds will increase more of these activities towards Of course, it is
also
 necessary to study other subjects to have all round knowledge. These include history, arts, music, commerce
etc
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arts
 by studying these we are well informed about our culture. The improve the understanding between each other and can over all enhance standard of living. Learning commerce gives an opportunity to get well versed with
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the economic development
 of the nation and helps to have a contribution in it. Chartered Accounts and Policy makers are equally important. To sum it up,
although
 science has a
majority
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major
 part in
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contributing
 to the progress of the nation, others
subjects even
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subjects, even
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play
 important element which cannot be overlooked or given less consideration.
Hence
, equal distributions of funds is necessary
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