The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.

The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. 

summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.
Given
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chart illustrates the rates of
the
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unemployed in Australia in 2012. It can be seen that the
percent
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of unemployment from rural areas showed a downward trend over the
mid –
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mid–period
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period
,
while
the percentage of
urban
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the urban
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unemployed population experienced a significant rise.
To begin
in the first
quarter
of
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period
, the percentage of jobless rural people witnessed over 6 %;
however
, over the following 2
quarters
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there was a sharp surge, nearly 2 %.
From the
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third
to fourth
quarter
of the
period
saw a fluctuation in the unemployment rate which depicted approximately 5 %
in
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the end of the
quarter
. When it comes to the urban
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population rate,
initial
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the initial
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quarter
experienced over 2 %;
however
, over the following
period
there was a marked growth, about 4 %. In the
third
quarter
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the percentage of jobless people declined significantly, around 2 %. In spite of the fact that
he
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the
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following double quarters there were fluctuations, it witnessed over 4 %
in
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the end of the year.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, third".
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, quarter with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.

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