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Some people think that economic progress is the only way to measure a country's success, while others think that there are other factors which can be used to measure a country's success full stop what are these factors ? Which of all factors do you think are most important?

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country
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's
development
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 depends on various factors. Not only money is the main
fact but
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fact, but
also
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 education,
investment
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 and production, entire military
force
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,
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,
advanced
technology
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 and communication system are the essential reasons behind a
country
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's
development
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. A camp of society deem that financial progression is the main way to assess a
country
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's prosperity whereas, another segment of persons believe that there are several reasons that can be used for measuring a
country
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's
success
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.
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I personally do not fall in with the statement because not only money brings a
country
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's
success
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 they are are several
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 and I will elaborate some factors in
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 essay related to the topic. In spite of having importance of money
,
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,
a
country
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 cannot go ahead without the others advancement
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 as education
,
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,
investment
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 and production
,
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 advanced
technology
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 and communication as well as entire military
force
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.
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, education is very crucial part
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of
 a
country
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's improvement. If the entire population
are not educated
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is not educated
 the
country
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 cannot make the prosperity.
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secondly
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Secondly
 the
development
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 of a
country
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 largely depends on its
investment
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 and manufacturing sectors. The
country
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 which
invest
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invests
 more they could make more and the eventual outcome of the
country
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's
success
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 will grow up day by day.
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, Australia, America and Russia are the most blooming countries in the globe because they have been focusing on their
investment
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 and production sectors.
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The advance
 of
technology
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 and entire military
force
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also
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 play a vital role behind the
development
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 of a
country
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. Military
force
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 could defend from
the the
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the
 enemies as well as strangers and advanced
technology
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 can affirm the better communication system which is
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 helpful for a
country
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's growth.
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In
 conclusion
,
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,
although
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 economic progress makes a great contribution
for
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to
 every
country
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's
success
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, but there are
also
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 some urgent factors and without them a
country
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's
success
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 cannot be assessed.
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