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Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do agree or disagree?

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Smoking is becoming more and more popular even though the harmful of smokers as well as the people around them.
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, smoking has been prohibited in all public places in many nations. While I agree that government should ban smoking entirely because of the harm it causes, I believe that other factors are equally important. On the one hand, smoking in now illegal in all public places like hospitals, restaurants, parks or public transports because two main reasons.
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 of all, smoking has serious negative consequences not only on the smoker's health, but
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 on those around them. There are many studies have been proven that tobacco consists of many substances that are seriously harmful to human health. People who are regularly exposed to tobacco
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 have an increased risk of respiratory, cardiovascular or even cancer diseases, especially children and pregnant women.
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, smoking
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 causes environmental pollution. The tip of the cigarette butt and the packaging after use generates a large amount of waste.Public places are places that general service to the needs of many people, so the discharge of tobacco waste into the environment is very daunting.
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, banning smoking in public places is essential.
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, in many places, smoking is considered as custom and tradition in their homeland, which has been a habit for many years so they cannot easily quit.
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, many people think that smoking is a matter of freedom of choice, smoking is not illegal, so individuals should have the freedom to
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 where they want. In short, I agree that banning smoking in public places is a good decision.
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, the decision of whether
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 or not to
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 should be for each individual to make, they should be free to
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