In some countries older people are being encouraged to work longer and not to retire. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working beyond retirement age.

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It is certainly true that some nations motivate their elderly people to work rather than taking retirement.Working after retirement age would be beneficial for
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the nation
and elderly employee, too
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but there are
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some
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the quality of being a hindrance
drawbacks
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approach.
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there are some following benefits of having grey work force
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Firstly
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, aged people are
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experts, therefore
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, they can resolve any issue with their past experiences that they have learnt from their past mistakes.
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, there are not impulsive by nature like
yougsters
a young person of either sex
youngsters
and they take all
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decisions
after full consideration.
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, in
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stage of life
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they most mostly suffer from isolation and loneliness.In
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way they will be more energetic and vibrant while working.
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, there is no scepticism every nation has been grappling with unemployment.
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kind of approach will make the problem more grimmer by reducing the chances of jobs for our young
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all the people living at the same time or of approximately the same age
generation
. It has been clearly seen that countries with
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age
workforce have
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a higher percentage
of unemployed people.
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moreover
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contemporary world success is based upon technology and old generation is technophobes with new innovations and resistant to learn new technology.
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therefore
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it is
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hard to be successful globally with elderly people.
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conclusion
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while there are some plus points of increasing
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the retirement age
retirement age
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too much would be loss
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increasing unemployment and not adapting new ways of technology cannot be neglected at any cost.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • standard of living
  • ameliorated
  • mentoring
  • physical health
  • mental decline
  • workforce diversity
  • exacerbate
  • quality of life
  • employment opportunities
  • work-life imbalance
  • ageism
  • retirement planning
  • pension funds
  • job market dynamics
  • seniority
  • compulsory retirement age
  • productive capacity
  • intergenerational collaboration
  • mentality
  • employer attitudes
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