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Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible. While others think that it should not start until 7 years of age. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

#people #education #children #years #age
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It is believed by some people that children should start attending
school
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 at an early
age
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 as it will help them learn things faster and complete their professional
education
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 before adulthood. While there are others who think the opposite and
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 people have the opinion that a
child
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's formal
education
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 should not start until he or she gets 7 years old. I completely agree with
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 assertion of not sending toddlers in schools.
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 with the advantages of an early
education
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, I admit that a
child
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's
mind
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 grasps fast in developing stage
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 considered between 1 to 10 years of
age
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. Parents think that kids’
mind
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 expands in
school
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 at a faster pace,
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 starting
education
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, early will help them grow as an intelligent person.
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, I believe that a
child
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 should learn creative things until he attains 6 to 7 years of
age
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 as It will help their
mind
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 works fast and in an innovative manner. If kids are taught formal subjects when they are not fully ready, they may start considering study as a burden.
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,
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 children lose interest in studies. In a research, it has been found that most of the college dropouts had started gaining
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 when they were only 4 to 5 years old while majority of innovative leaders started their formal
education
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 late. In conclusion, as it is evident that sending a
child
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 in
school
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 before he or she turns 7 years old may have negative effects on his
mind
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 and his creativity gets killed so I think that a law should be there to put a certain
age
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 limit for starting
school
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education
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 for kids.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Social interactions
  • Formative years
  • Curiosity
  • Structured environments
  • Preschool activities
  • Unstructured play
  • Developmental pace
  • Emotional and social skills
  • Undue stress and pressure
  • Natural development
  • Informal learning methods
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