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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays, convenience
food
 is rapidly replacing the traditional foods and is having detrimental impacts not only f
amilies but
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families, but
also
 societies have been receiving a great deal of public attention.
Although
this
 trend creates a lot of convenience for people in life, the disadvantages will be far more significant. There are a number of compelling reasons why fast
food
 gradually replaces traditional
food
 and has many serious consequences.
First
, since most people are getting more and more busy, they don’t have time to cook as the fast
food
 industry was born to meet the needs of the people. Human eat fast
food
 too much, it s
uffer
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suffers
from health deterioration as fast
food
 contains a lot of fat and low in f
iber
a slender and greatly elongated substance capable of being spun into yarn
fibre
,
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,
which causes diseases like heart diseases, obesity and blood pressure.
Second
, by eating a lot of fast
food
, it will reduce the quality of time for family.
This
 means that people do not cook often and eat fast
food
instead
, which leads limit family gatherings.
In addition
, eating convenience
food
instead
 of traditional
food
 p
ose
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poses
a threat to national cuisines and culinary arts.
This
 means that people will lose traditional skills for cooking traditional foods. The
last
 thing is fast
food
 have t
hreaten
Suggestion
threatened
local economy, makes small
food
 stores lose c
utomers,
someone who pays for goods or services
customers
 which makes reduce revenues. In conclusion, by raising awareness about the disadvantages of fast
food
, it does not only pose threats to f
amily relationship,
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a family relationship
family relationships
 but
also
 to people’s health and cultural aspects.
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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