the chart below shows the changes that took place in 3 different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003 - 2012 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the chart below shows the changes that took place in 3 different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003 - 2012 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates
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crime
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of
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3 different areas in Newport city centre from 2003 to 2012,
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only
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years.
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, Robbery has gradually increased from approximately 510 in 2003 to almost 1000 in 2005 and steady discount to 500 in 2008, After that,
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in
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550 in 2010 and a slight decrease to 505 in 2011. And in 2012 have 510 like in 2003. Car theft have 2900 in 2003 and
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slight
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decreased
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to 2700 in 2005 after that steady decrease to 2000 in 2006, And gradually
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to almost 2550 in 2010 and discount to 2500 in 2011. In 2012 have 2900 like
2003
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years. And the
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burglary has around 3400 in 2003 and increase to 3700 in 2004
after
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contraction
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to 1100 in 2008 and increase to 1400 in 2009, After remaining steady
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1500 and a slight decrease to around 1400 in 2012.
Overall
, In Newport city centre from 2003 to 2012. Robbery has remained steady to start and end
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, Have 600 in 2003 and 2012. Car theft
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started too high but
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gradually decreases to 2000 in 2006 and after that gradually
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to 2900 in 2012. Burglary start too high more than another, but
on the other
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very
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to 1100 in 2008 and in 2012 have 1400.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "after this".
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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