Many of the medical problems that people are experiencing in today's world are due to the fact that we have a very sedentary lifestyle. To what extent to you agree?

Nowadays, more and more people suffer from
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issues caused by sedentary lifestyles. I completely agree with
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statement, as inactivity can lead to both physical and mental
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that lower people’s quality of life. One of the most common consequences of a sedentary lifestyle is obesity. People who sit for long periods and rarely exercise burn fewer calories than active individuals, which makes them more likely to gain excess weight. Obesity is strongly linked to illnesses
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as diabetes, heart disease, and joint
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, office workers who spend most of their time sitting in front of a computer often struggle with weight gain, which can harm their long-term
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to physical illnesses, inactivity
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affects mental well-being. People who do not engage in exercise are more likely to suffer from stress, anxiety, and depression.
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is because physical activity helps release chemicals in the brain that improve mood. Without regular exercise, individuals may
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face sleep
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and feelings of isolation, both of which worsen their mental state.
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, a lack of movement can reduce people’s mobility and independence over time. Muscles and joints become weaker without regular use, making everyday activities harder.
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is especially dangerous for older adults, as they may lose mobility earlier and face a higher risk of injuries. In conclusion, a sedentary lifestyle has serious negative impacts, including obesity, mental
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issues, and reduced physical ability. These
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clearly show that inactivity harms both body and mind, proving that
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lifestyle should be avoided.

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Show a even more clear view by saying you may not see all parts of the issue, even if you agree fully.
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Give a little more detail to each point with short, clear facts or examples.
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Clear and strong stance on the topic.
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Good use of example (office workers) to illustrate obesity.
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Good overall structure with a clear intro, body points, and conclusion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Cardiovascular health
  • Prolonged inactivity
  • Obesity
  • Hypertension
  • Coronary artery disease
  • Stroke
  • Diabetes
  • Mental health
  • Depression
  • Anxiety
  • Musculoskeletal health
  • Back pain
  • Posture
  • Osteoporosis
  • Prevention
  • Walking
  • Standing desks
  • Regular exercise
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