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With the increased global demand in iol and gas undiscovered areas should be opened up to access more sources.to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#demand #iol #gas #areas #access #sources
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It is argued that as a solution
for
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to
 the growing demand for the fossil
fuel
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, the untouched areas of the earth should be explored in order to find new resources.
However
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, I personally disagree with
this
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 notion completely because the prevailing air pollution
can not
can not
cannot
 be halted with the sustained consumption of
oil
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 and gas and these exploratory activities have detrimental effects on the natural environment.
To begin
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 with, ongoing air
pollution which
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pollution, which
 has catastrophic effects on the whole live hood of the world is not possible unless people restrict the utilization of the fossil
fuel
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.
This
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 is because burning of
oil
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 and gas emits
collosal
so great in size or force or extent as to elicit awe
colossal
 amount of toxic
fuem
gases ejected from an engine as waste products
fumes
to
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into
in
 the atmosphere leading to global warming and detrimental health problems.
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, it is imperative to search for
eco
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Eco
 friendly
fuel
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 resources
such
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 as solar or wind power irrespective of
pursuiting
a sign posted in a public place as an advertisement
posting
 novel fossil
fuel
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 stores. For an example, recent research done in the UK has revealed that the global warming has soared considerably due to the increase in the number of fossil
fuel
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 dependant motor vehicles on roads.
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, damage to the native environment is inevitable with the conduction of
oil
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 and gas exploration activities.
Infact
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In fact
, natural
eco system
a system formed by the interaction of a community of organisms with their physical environment
ecosystem
 and a plethora of animal species in untouched areas get destroyed
with
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by
 deploying machinery which are used to discover
fuel
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 resources. For an instance, recent
fuel
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 exploration mission done in the deep Arctic
sea bed
the bottom of a sea or ocean
seabed
 has resulted in hazardous effects on several sea plants and species of sea animals. In conclusion,
although
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 finding novel
oil
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 and gas stores in undisclosed parts is a one way to combat with the increasing demand, it is not appropriate resolution because sustained burning of fossil
fuel
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accelerate
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accelerates
 the ongoing air pollution and exploring
undisturbes
untroubled by interference or disturbance
undisturbed
 areas
further
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 harm the native environment.
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, the most viable strategy is to find
eco
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Eco
 friendly new alternatives.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • energy security
  • global demand
  • undiscovered areas
  • environmental impact
  • ecosystems
  • oil spills
  • technological advancements
  • fossil fuels
  • sustainable energy
  • geopolitical tensions
  • economic benefits
  • regulatory frameworks
  • responsibly
  • dependency
  • diversifying
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