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It is expected that there will be a higher proportion of older people than that of young people in many countries in the future? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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In the upcoming years, it is predicted that the percentage of the elderly
was
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were
 larger than that of youngsters in many nations. While I accept that there are some benefits and drawbacks to
this
 decision, I would argue that it is better for a higher proportion of adolescents. On the one hand, there are some advantages
for
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of
 several nations, which has a higher percentage of the elderly.
Firstly
, it is an apparent fact that there is a reduction in educational pressure.
This
 stems from the decrease in the
children
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child
 number.
As a result
, the government could devote more money and energy to invest in other sectors to serve citizens
such
 as upgrade the transport system and improving environmental conditions.
On the other hand
, it seems to me that because of some undeniable disadvantages. The main shortcoming is the lack of labour production.
This
 leads to a decrease in labour productivity in the industrial area.
As a result
, the economy of nations will dramatically reduce.
For instance
, according to the research of economists, The labour productivity of the nation, which has
old
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the oldest
 population, was half that of the young population. Another disadvantage is that the government deals with many health-related problems.
This
 makes the government must invest more in health. The
salient most
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examples
 of
this
 is over 30% national budget in Japan expenditure on medical service, including building hospitals and medical centres. In conclusion, I believe that there are some plus points to the higher percentage of the elderly,
although
this
 decision has some notable downsides.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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