Both government and individuals are spending a large amount of money for protecting animals and their habitat. This money should be better spent dealing with fundamental issues in society such as poverty and health care. To what extent do you agree?

There is no doubt that, animals are illegally being hunted for

foods

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foods, food

food

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(plural of

food

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is

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food

benefit

good

since it is an uncountable noun.)

and

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decorative purposes in many parts of the world, and to protect them from hunters, governments spend huge sums of money.

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Even though

I largely agree that governments should prioritise

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money to solve the issues of

humans

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humans, such

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as

poverty

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and

health

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care

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, I believe that the state has the responsibility to protect animal

species

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to a certain extent. Admittedly, the primary responsibility of every government is to

fullfill

put in effect

fulfil

the fundamental rights of its citizens

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as

food

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, cloth,

health

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care

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(Connect

such

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as with fundamental rights.

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,

food

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is not a fundamental right,

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is to fulfil the fundamental rights

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as right to healthy

food

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of its citizens.). There are many people in our country who are deprived of

food

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and unable to access the quality

health

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care

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.

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,

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,

unfortunately,

poverty

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and

health

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care

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is

are

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being

closely interconnected.

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is because, when a member

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of

a destitute family will become gets (use simple present tense) injured or ill, the entire household will ultimately

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end

up with low income and high

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care

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costs.

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, the WHO’s World

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Organisation’s statistics in the

last

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year showed that the infant mortality rate and nutritional deficiency disease

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were

higher in low income families than in affluent ones.

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why, many people favour that

government

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the government

should allocate its budget to give preference to mitigate the social evils

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as

poverty

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and famine rather than protection of animals.

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to alleviate

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to alleviating

alleviating

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these social issues, I believe that governments have the responsibility to protect its flora and fauna along with their natural habitat. To elaborate, we are unaware that a vast number of animal and plant

species

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are dwindling in number due to poaching and human encroachment (be specific and leave no vagueness) other reasons.

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, they are

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on

the verge of extinction, and

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leading (are THEY leading to loss of biodiversity. Use a word that refers to “the verge of extinction”)

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leads to loss of biodiversity which is essential for healthy and functional ecosystem.

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, these plant and animal

species

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are vitally important to prevent epidemics and to protect the public from diseases.

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, a lot of vaccines are derived from the chemicals produced by animals.

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, wildlife conservation programmes and management of financial resource for animal protections

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need attention. In conclusion, it is believed by some that animal protection campaigns and programmes are given wide preferences by authorities. Despite I widely strongly believe that a government should bestow more importance to the

health

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and

poverty

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of its citizens,

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however governments

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however, governments

practices to protect the endangered

species

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should not be underrated.