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In recent years some countries have experienced very rapid economic development. This has resulted in much higher standards of living in urban areas but not in the countryside. This situation may bring some problems for the country as a whole. What are these problems? How might they be reduced? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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y.
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
Moreover
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urben
area
, so th
ey live in
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urban areas
urban area
an urban area
 peaceful environm
ent because they get
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a peaceful environment
 many things, which is very important their
l
ife.
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important in their life
important to their life
Although
, those all good th
ings are not possible
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all those good things
 in rural
area
, so wh
ich is not
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rural areas
a rural area
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country
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the entire country
an entire country
this
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also
 share solution for it in
further
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this
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era, many
ot of money for
the
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lots
ir people
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 why those
country
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city
area
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not possi
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the city area
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it's
village
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.
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the village area
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area
, peopl
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rural areas
a rural area
et any
facility
 for their
life
, which is not good for their future.
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port city in the United Arab Emirates on the Persian Gulf
Dubai
facility
 in
urben
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facilities
area
such
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s free wif
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urban areas
urban area
an urban area
open area
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i for their work, free medicine for their health and
also
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r currer
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good jobs
a good job
.
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in
 other
side,
the particular occupation for which you are trained
career
carer
carrier
in rural
area
, peopl
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rural areas
a rural area
this
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s of
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don't get
aren't getting
fac
ility, whi
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these types
this type
ch is very bad for their day to day
life
. Nowadays, people feel secure in
urben
area
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e
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urban areas
urban area
an urban area
open area
city
area
 has best security lik
e cctv camera
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the best security
,
life
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CCTV
rds and so on, which is good for their happy
life
.
Nevertheless
, these all things are not possible in
village
area
.
For
instance, i
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the village area
village areas
n
mumbai
, in
urben
area,
a city in western India just off the coast of the Arabian Sea; India's most populous city; has the only natural deep-water harbor in western India
Mumbai
peopl
e can enjo
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urban areas
urban area
an urban area
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mu
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at
mbai
city
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o many
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the Mumbai city
Mumbai city
life
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in big
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the public
city
 like
mum
bai. tho
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a big city
big cities
the big city
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ural
a city in western India just off the coast of the Arabian Sea; India's most populous city; has the only natural deep-water harbor in western India
Mumbai
are
a's pe
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Though
ople not get
this
facility
that is
 why in
village
area
, cri
me rate is v
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the village area
village areas
er
y high in
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the crime rate
mumbai
.
a city in western India just off the coast of the Arabian Sea; India's most populous city; has the only natural deep-water harbor in western India
Mumbai
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facility
, which i
s import
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facilities
ant for their
life
 but it compa
re to
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life, but
villag
e
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compares
area
, people have many problem for their
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problems
life
, a
nd
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in
also
 for their family.
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country
, so
me people liv
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the whole country
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t all so ba
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happily, but
sically it is not good for
country
's future
because those
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the country's future
country
's people are not happy, so those
country
's future is not safe.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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