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In recent years some countries have experienced very rapid economic development. This has resulted in much higher standards of living in urban areas but not in the countryside. This situation may bring some problems for the country as a whole. What are these problems? How might they be reduced? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In past years few countries grow rapidly with high success, which good for countries economy.
Moreover
, In those countries, whose people live in urban
field
, so they live in a peaceful environment because they get many things, which is very important in their growth.
Although
, all those good things are not possible in rural ranges, so which is not good for the entire rustic. I will examine
this
 problem, and
also
 share solution for it in
further
 paragraphs. In
this
 present era, many countries have lots of money for their people
that is
 why those homey's people live well in
there
of them or themselves
their
city
 operation but it's not possible in
suburb
field
.
Furthermore
, in a rural space, people do not get any facilities
for
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in
 their
heart
, which is not good for their future.
For example
, In Dubai, people get many facilities in
urban
Suggestion
the urban field
an urban field
field
such
 as free wifi for their work, free medicine for their health and
also
 get good jobs in their
first
 career. In other side, in rural spaces, people don't get
this types
Suggestion
these types
this type
 of facilities
,
Accept space
,
which is very bad for their day to day soul. Nowadays, people feel secure in
urban
Suggestion
the urban field
an urban field
field
 because
city
 operation has the best security like CCTV camera,
heart
 guards and so on, which is good for their happy
heart
.
Nevertheless
, these all things are not possible in
suburb
field
.
For instance
, in
Mumbai
, in urban
field
, people can enjoy at night because
Mumbai
Suggestion
the Mumbai city
city
 has so many
heart
 guards, which is very important for the public, who live in a big
city
 like
Mumbai
. Though, rural
field
's people not get
this
 facility
that is
 why in
suburb
field
, the crime rate is very high in
Mumbai
. To recapitulate, people can get all good facilities, which is important for their
heart but
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heart, but
 it compares to
suburb
field
, people have many problems
in
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with
 their
heart
, and
also
 for their family.
In addition
, overall in the whole rustic, some people live happily, but not at all so basically it is not good for
provincial's future
Suggestion
the provincial's future
 because those bucolic's people are not happy, so those rustic's
future
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futures
 is not safe.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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