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The table below shows data for the largest lakes by area and their depths. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows data for the largest lakes by area and their depths. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 data sheet presents numeral information for the 10 largest lakes
in
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 the Earth by
area
 and their maximum
depth
. First of all, the
area
 of
Caspian
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the Caspian
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 Sea(371,000 square meters), which is the first ranked is remarkably larger than other lakes. It is approximately 4.5 times larger than the
second biggest
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lake
 in the world,
Lake
 Superior.
Secondly
, there is no correlation
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 the numbers
of
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area
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the area
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 and maximum
depth
. As we see,
Caspian
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the Caspian
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 Sea is the largest
lake
 in the world,
although
 it is not the deepest one.
Besides
,
Lake
 Baikal is the deepest
lake
in
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 our planet, which
maximum
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depth
 is 1,470 meters, but ranked seventh by
area
.
Moreover
,
Lake
 Victoria has only 82 meters of maximum
depth
, though it is the
second biggest
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second-biggest
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lake
in
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 the planet, as
i
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 mentioned above.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, depth, lake with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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