The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Traditional ideas
such
as
hardwork
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hard work
and
loyality
the quality of being loyal
loyalty
with
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to
employer
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employers
the employer
are believed to be an ideal way of living by older generations; others,
however
, argue that
such
ideas are not useful for
younger generation
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the younger generation
younger generations
a younger generation
in modern life. I agree with the latter because being innovative and opportunistic is more significant to survive in today’s competitive world. I admit that
hardwork
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hard work
is one of the key factors to achieve success.
However
, it is not sufficient on its own. It requires innovation to survive in today’s competitive world.
That is
to say, innovating tools and methods that saves time will reduce some
work load
work that a person is expected to do in a specified time
workload
, thereby saving time which can be
then
utilized for something else.
For example
, earlier bankers used to process debit and credit transactions themselves, but now people use ATM machines to withdraw and deposit money in their account.
This
helped them to focus
oon
located at or attached to
on
in
other activities
such
as providing investment advices or
sellling
the exchange of goods for an agreed sum of money
selling
insurance. Working for the same employer for their entire life was another factor that our forefathers considered important.
This
limits an employee’s
chances
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chance
of learning about different work culture and skills.
Also
, there
is
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are
a minimal options to grow in the same organisation. Changing organisations help employees to learn new skills and to increase their compensation, which is crucial to meet financial needs of their family.
For example
, employees who have worked in different firms tend to grasp best practices of each which help them
grwo
become larger, greater, or bigger; expand or gain
grow
their knowledge. In conclusion, I believe that doing smart work and working
in
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with
diverse companies help people grow their skills and knowledge along with the added
monetory
relating to or involving money
monetary
benefits
that is
much needed to meet their family’s financial needs.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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