The chart and table show the number of fishers in millions for different regions between 1970, 1980 and 2000, and the world's top ten exporters of fish in 2000.

The chart and table show the number of fishers in millions for different regions between 1970, 1980 and 2000, and the world's top ten exporters of fish in 2000.
The graph reveals the
quantity
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of
fishermen
between 1970 and 2000 in different continents and the table describes the top ten fish exporters in the world in the year 2000.
Overall
, fishing communities had developed in size in most countries and regions, with the number of fishers in
Asia
more numerous and
Asia
countries leading the list of exporters.
According to
the data in the bar chart, the
amount
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of
fishermen
tended to accelerate in
Asia
, Africa and North
America
from 1970 to 2000. In
Asia
, the
number of
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fisheries population abruptly surged
roughly
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16 million,
whereas
there is a modest growth of
fishermen
in Africa and North
America
. After
that
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the figure stayed stable
in
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fishing
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the fishing
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population in Europe and South
America
. Especially, in
Europe
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the
fishermen
reached the lowest point of the bottom at 0.4 million in 1980,
while
this
figure still kept constant
roughly
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1.2 million from 1970 to 2000 in South
America
. Turning to the table, there was a more detailed look at the chart in 2000 that indicated
top
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ten exporters of fish in the world. Thailand is the world's leading fish exporter, but European and North American countries
also
rank in the
next
ranks. Norway and Denmark are in
second
and fifth place,
while
the United States is in the
third
largest export position and Canada is sixth. China and Taiwan took fourth and seventh place,
while
Russia, Indonesia and South Korea took eighth, ninth and tenth place respectively.

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