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There is an increaseing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family what are the advantage and disadvantage

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There is an increasing trend around the world to have a
neuclear
(weapons) deriving destructive energy from the release of atomic energy
nuclear
 family rather than a big family. There are
benifits
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
 and
drowbacks
the quality of being a hindrance
drawbacks
 of having a small family rather than a large family. On the one hand, nowadays small families are rising significantly while there
are
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is
dramatic decrease
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a dramatic decrease
the dramatic decrease
 in large families. There are several advantages of having a
neuclear
(weapons) deriving destructive energy from the release of atomic energy
nuclear
 family.
Firstly
, people would spend a small amount of
money
 in a small family while in a big family they are spending a lot of
money
.
Secondly
, parents in a small family will have enough time to
set
be seated
sit
 with
thier
of them or themselves
their
three
 children, teach them and care of them rather than a large family.
Finally
, people in a
neuclear
(weapons) deriving destructive energy from the release of atomic energy
nuclear
 family could have time to travel and that would not cost them much
money but
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money, but
 in a big family it is difficult to go abroad and
also
 that cost a lot of
money
.
On the other hand
, there are many disadvantages of having a
neuclear
(weapons) deriving destructive energy from the release of atomic energy
nuclear
 family. The main
drowback
the quality of being a hindrance
drawback
 is that people in a small family will not have many siblings and
also
 they may become introverts while in a big
family they
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family, they
 could have many relatives
such
 as
neice
any of numerous small rodents typically resembling diminutive rats having pointed snouts and small ears on elongated bodies with slender usually hairless tails
mice
nice
noise
,
niphew
a son of your brother or sister
nephew
 and cousin and that would improve their personality.
Moreover
, having many relatives
such
 as brothers, sisters and uncles will improve your knowledge and would help you how to deal with others, which it is not available in a small family.
Furthermore
, parties in a
neuclear
(weapons) deriving destructive energy from the release of atomic energy
nuclear
 family would be
small
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smaller
 rather than a big family, which it could be a huge party. In conclusion, nowadays people prefer to be in a
neuclear
(weapons) deriving destructive energy from the release of atomic energy
nuclear
 family rather than a big family and
that is
 good for
thier
of them or themselves
their
 economy or
budjet
a sum of money allocated for a particular purpose
budget
budgets
 but it might
effect
have an effect upon
affect
thier
of them or themselves
their
 personality.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Demographic trends
  • Family planning
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Birth rate
  • Population growth
  • Child-rearing
  • Single-child policy
  • Work-life balance
  • Sustainable living
  • Intergenerational support
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