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These days, children tend to spend a great deal of time playing computer games. Some believe this is a beneficial trend while others think it is detrimental. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Electronic devices has
influance
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influenced
influence
 the society at a growing rate
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 Both advantages and side effects of these gadgets can be easily
detect
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detected
on
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in
 humans and mostly on the youth generation. Are these appliances secure for the youth as parents tend to gift
these tool
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these tools
this tool
 to children at a young
age but
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age, but
 many parents like
there
of them or themselves
their
 offspring to play physically rather
visually
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visually?
 Technology is
gradgually
in a gradual manner
gradually
 diversifying day by day and society is changing and adopting these changes and now gadgets have become a part of one’s life.
youth
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Youth
 are immature and at a growing stage and these devices can help them to memorise study
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 to communicate
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 for stress-bursting and many more but at the same time electronic tools can damage the
neuro
of or relating to the nervous system
neural
 impulse present in our brain through radiations
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 Let us discuss some positive and negatives Electronic devices create great sense and imagination power in children and develop a good listening
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 learning
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 speech and visualising ability
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 It can
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 pleasure them by allowing them to have fun. Devices can be modified easily and can be used for several purposes which can
develope
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develop
 analytical skills in children. Moving on to the Negatives it
damage
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damages
 the
sensory neurological
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sensory, neurological
 impulse present in our brain because the radiations emitted by devices like mobiles
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 PC
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 laptops can cause brain damage
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 headache
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
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 Increasing in obesity
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 lack of concentration
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 hamper the overall growth
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 strain on
eyes
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the eyes
 are
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 side effects of electric devices and mostly wastage of time without any productive meaning is the main problem faced by parents
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Conclusion
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A conclusion
The conclusion
 can be that children should be provided with tools because the technology is
rising but
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rising, but
 with certain restrictions and parents should focus more on physical development and keep children involve in sports activities and cultural program for motor development
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