These days, children tend to spend a great deal of time playing computer games. Some believe this is a beneficial trend while others think it is detrimental. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Electronic devices has

influance

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influenced

influence

the society at a growing rate

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Both advantages and side effects of these gadgets can be easily

detect

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detected

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humans and mostly on the youth generation. Are these appliances secure for the youth as parents tend to gift

these tool

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these tools

this tool

to children at a young

age but

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age, but

many parents like

there

of them or themselves

their

offspring to play physically rather

visually

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visually?

Technology is

gradgually

in a gradual manner

gradually

diversifying day by day and society is changing and adopting these changes and now gadgets have become a part of one’s life.

youth

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Youth

are immature and at a growing stage and these devices can help them to memorise study

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to communicate

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for stress-bursting and many more but at the same time electronic tools can damage the

neuro

of or relating to the nervous system

neural

impulse present in our brain through radiations

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Let us discuss some positive and negatives Electronic devices create great sense and imagination power in children and develop a good listening

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learning

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speech and visualising ability

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It can

also

pleasure them by allowing them to have fun. Devices can be modified easily and can be used for several purposes which can

develope

make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation

develop

analytical skills in children. Moving on to the Negatives it

damage

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damages

the

sensory neurological

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sensory, neurological

impulse present in our brain because the radiations emitted by devices like mobiles

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laptops can cause brain damage

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headache

etc

continuing in the same way

etc.

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Increasing in obesity

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lack of concentration

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hamper the overall growth

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strain on

eyes

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the eyes

are

also

side effects of electric devices and mostly wastage of time without any productive meaning is the main problem faced by parents

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Conclusion

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A conclusion

The conclusion

can be that children should be provided with tools because the technology is

rising but

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rising, but

with certain restrictions and parents should focus more on physical development and keep children involve in sports activities and cultural program for motor development

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Fully explain your ideas

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Many people believe that today there is a general increase in anti-social behavior and lack of respect for others. What might have caused this? How to improve this problem?