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Nowadays air travel is cheaper than in the past. Is this a positive or a negative development? Discuss and give your own opinion.

#air #travel #development
There is no
sceptisim
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scepticism
 travelling by
air
 has become very affordable in comparison to previous years.In my opinion , I
cosider
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consider
 it as both positive development and negative development because it connects us with other parts of
this
 world in
very
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 fast and quick manner and
also
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is also
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 the cause of
air
pollution
. To start with, The prime reason to consider
air
 travel as a positive
occurance
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occurrence
because
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 it has made our journey very quick by saving
our
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us
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 lots of time. To elaborate ,in big
country
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,
such
 as India ,the time taken to travel from one city to another has reduced significantly with the developments in aeroplane services.
Secondly
, aeroplanes
has
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 given a chance to flourish their business globally because a person can reach any part of the world to make networks for trade.
For example
, it has been clearly seen that
Increase
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 in flights internationally has been
direcly
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directly
 linked
sharp
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the sharp
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 rise in trade between
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 nations.
Furthermore
,on the downside, in
this
 contemporary time ,
emission
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through
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 airplanes
is
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are
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 one of the biggest
cause
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causes
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 of
air
pollution
.Recent
survey
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surveys
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has
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have
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 shown that
toxic
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level
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 of
air
 has gone up by two
percent
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 in the
last
 five years.It is not only
cause
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 of
air
pollution
,
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 but
also
 noise
pollution
 too.
Moreover
,
this
 way of commuting is using
exahustible
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exhaustible
inexhaustible
source
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sources
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 of fuel at
alarming
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 rate.In one trip a plane
use
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uses
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 gallons of
fuels
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fuel
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 which can be used by hundreds of cars to keep moving.It is
cerainly
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certainly
 true
taht
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that
 everything has its own positives and negatives. It depends upon us how wisely we use
the
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things to maximise
its
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their
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 benefits and reduce
its
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their
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 drawbacks. In conclusion, Increasing
air
 travel is a both
postive
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positive
 and negative development. it depends upon
human
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humans
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 how to use it effectively and to
strika
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strike
 a balance ,
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