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Topic 1: In the future, students may have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computers or television or of studying at traditional schools. Which would you prefer? Use reasons and specific details to explain your choice.

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In the
future
, with the development of technology, many things (especially education) will change. Students can choose either
study
 at home with technology (computers, television...)
or
introduces an alternative
Or
study
 at traditional
school
. To my way of thinking, I prefer studying at a traditional
schoolschool
 because of its benefit.
First
 of all,
school
 is a good environment to socialize and interact with others. When students go to
school
, they can meet and make more friends. They can talk to their friends face to face, playing together at
breaktime
Suggestion
break time
.
As a result
, they can express their feelings and understand others’ feeling well.
For example
, a student who
go
Suggestion
goes
 to
school
 will be more active and
socialiable
capable of being scaled; possible to scale
scalable
 than a student who just
study
 on computer at home. Studying at
school
 helps students
study
 effectively by discussing with their classmates, expressing their point of view and listening to other people opinion about a specific subject.
Furthermore
, students can learn team-building skill by working with friends in a group to win a game or
to
being one more than one
two
 finish an assignment.
Also
, teachers always provide their experiences, their own knowledge in the society and their life skills that are not on the Internet. They are all very useful for students’
future
. What is more, studying at traditional schools makes students better. At
school
, teachers do not only teach them lecture subject, but only personality which is extremely important for students’
future
. Teachers teach them to be honest people, to help others, to behave good manner and so on. Sometimes, students’ dreams come from their own teachers, their own
school
 and their friends. On the whole, modern society offers students more choices to choose the way they want to
study
 (at home with technology or at schools with friends and teachers). I still believe that traditional schools are the best place for students to
study
 both now and in the
future
.
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