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The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicines. Government funding should reflect this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The provided bar chart gives information about the proportion of volunteers who helped in organizing sport in New Zealand by household types in the year of 2010. Units are measured in per cent
s. The pi
a proportion in relation to a whole (which is usually the amount per hundred)
percents
e chart depicts how many volunteers worked on NSW’s sport support roles at the same period of time. Overall, what stands out from the graph is that there was positive
correlation between
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a positive correlation
 the quantity of family members and volunteers, whereas the number of coaches, instructors or teachers was the highest among other sport supporting roles. In terms of the volunteering, couples with the young ones relying on them were over double that of pairs without children aged 0 to 15 half and just over a quarter respectively.
Similarly
, the percentage of dependent childless couples was cons
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were
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%, respectively
 households accounted for nearly a tenth of volunteers.
On the other hand
, coaches, instructors and teachers made up the biggest part of the chart, while the medical supporters or others were the
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st significant part, corresponding to 206,000 and 62,700 respectively.
In contrast
, scorers or time keepers did not comprise as many volunteers as committee members or administrators, with 128,000 compared to 158,600. The remaining volunteers made up 98,300 working as referees or umpires.

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