In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

Our Social, economic conditions has evolved with time and it
lead
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leads
to change in
way
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the way
ways
a way
we
shop
these days. Earlier shopping was done to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
the needs e.g.
people
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People
required new cloth due to season change. But now people do shopping not because of
needs but
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needs, but
because it gives them fulfilment. One of the positive
outcome
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outcomes
of
this
phenomenon is that it helps to generate employment. Earlier people used to go to
markets
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market
for shopping but now these markets are replaced by malls. These malls are
single avenue
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a single avenue
where people from different section of society and
differnt
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
walks of life gather to watch
movie
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a movie
, have dinner and shopping. Given heavy footfall of people
to
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in
malls, these become primary places where people
shop
these days. All the different clothing
,
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,
jewellary
an adornment (as a bracelet or ring or necklace) made of precious metals and set with gems (or imitation gems)
jewellery
or electronic brands are available at single place which gives employment to
lot
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a lot
lots
of people in stores,
eatries
a building where people go to eat
eateries
,
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,
parking, security and maintenance related work within malls.
Second positive
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The second positive outcome
outcome
of shopping is that it helps circulation of
money
within
economic ecosystem
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an economic ecosystem
. It is believed that economy is healthy if
money
keeps exchanging hands. People
now shops
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are now shopping
not only for
needs but
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needs, but
also
to get
sense
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a sense
of satisfaction.
This
means
money which
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money, which
was earlier blocked in
accounts
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the accounts
of people have one more avenue to be back into
circle
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circulation
,
thus
shopping helps to promote economic spending which is
positive
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a positive outcome
outcome
.
Third positive
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The third positive outcome
outcome
of shopping is emotional well being of the people who indulge
into
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in
it for
sake
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the sake
of pleasure. They consider it as
stress relieving activity
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a stress relieving activity
which helps them to feel positive after doing shopping. In
this
context
,
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,
it is good if someone spend
money
to
shop
instead
of taking medicines to eliminate stress
cause
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caused
by work or other reasons.
Fourth positive
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The fourth positive outcome
outcome
for shopping is that it promotes creative ideas due to
competion
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
compression
compaction
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
it is positive for people who as associated with companies where people spend
money
on shopping. Given people spend
money
for shopping round the year it means companies needs to generate new ideas to attract
customors
someone who pays for goods or services
customers
so that they keep coming to try new products. In the
end to
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end, to
conclude, we should not look at shopping from
micropic view
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the micropic view
micro pic view
of spending
money
. It needs to be looked as economic activity which generates different avenue for people to earn livelihood, be creative and attain
emotional health
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the emotional health
for people who
shop
and
also
who are associated in different related industries.

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