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The most qualified jobs have the highest salaries in my country,
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 as medicine because
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 kind of jobs deal with the most important issues of humans. I think teachers who give classes in primary and secondary schools and
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 high schools should have had better salaries because they are bringing new generations up. I do not agree with
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. Everyone should have enough salary to live with dignity, but some jobs need more effort than others, and they deserve to be rewarded well. It depends on which mood I am
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. If I am stressed and want to get relaxed, I prefer soft
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,
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 as classical
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. If I want to up my mood, I prefer electronic
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 or maybe pop
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. I mostly like to listen to
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 when I feel good and have spare time because
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 is generally about being happy. When you are happy, you listen to
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 to enjoy yourself more. I used to try to learn how to play the piano, but it started getting harder after a while so I gave up doing so. I don't think all children should learn how to play a musical instrument if they are not eager to do do. Parents shouldn't force children to learn an instrument because It is not good for a child's psychological development. I want to talk about my shopping from the Adidas
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. I needed a new pair of slipper because the old one had been torn off. The shop offers a wide range of products, from sports equipment to underwear. The
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 looks like any
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 in a mall, but it is relatively large, so you don't feel suffocated when shopped, and
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 it takes a short time to try a product in fitting rooms because there are enough of them in there. The
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 is located in a mall which very close to my place so it takes about 20 minutes to go to the
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 by walk.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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