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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The changes in expenditure purposes every year of a particular UK school are illustrated in three pie charts following
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 years 1981, 1991 and 2001. All figures are measured in percentage. It can be clearly seen from the pie charts that
teacher’s
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teachers’

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 salaries had always been
counting
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 for the majority meanwhile insurance occupied the lowest rate in total
expense
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expenses

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. During the two decades, the proportion of insurance spending went up dramatically; noticeably, the figure in 2001 was four times as much as the one in 1981.
On the contrary
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, the rate of other workers’ salaries underwent a downward trend to only
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half at the beginning of
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 century.
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, both resources e.g. books and teachers’ salaries observed slight increases between 1981 and 1991 and drops in 2001.
In contrast
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, the amount of furniture and equipment expenditure fell rapidly in the first decade and
then
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 soared in
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Annual spending
  • Expenditure categories
  • Allocation
  • Trend analysis
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Budget allocation strategy
  • Inflation-adjusted
  • Future implications
  • Educational institutions
  • Technological resources
  • Maintenance and operations
  • Comparative analysis
  • Fiscal management
  • Resource allocation
  • Strategic planning
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