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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life in other planets some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing problems of public to what extent do you agree or disagree

#government #money #life #planets #people
Now-a-days all the nations are interested in the invention of survival on other planets
,
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while governing bodies spend a lot of wealth for the formulation of
this
 while others oppose that cash should be spent for society by solving basic problems especially in developing countries.I partially agree with statement and will discuss below.
To begin
 with current worldwide their authorities are dealing with some mission as to discover new life on other planets.
For instance
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In USA they have found out a new life on the moon, even found out water for survival.
Furthermore people
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Furthermore, people
 started to purchase land and own the property on another planet.
This
 shows those people are fast forwarding in innovating new things.But authorities pour a large amount of cash on these creations.
Consequently funds
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Consequently, funds
 get reduced for government.
On the other hand
, the ministry should consider problems of public basic needs
such
 as health
care
,
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,
education etc.
For example
,
Accept space
,
In USA currently because of the global pandemic corona crisis, hospitals are not sufficient to give
care
 to public
also
 health
care
 workers are minimal.So that because of less medics people are dying Before these situations arises ministry can allot money to construct hospitals and
also
 help some individuals for providing health
care
 education.
This
 may reduce the mortality rate of those people. To sum up, spending money on to search for life on other planets may be helpful, but should consider the basic things about people like food, shelter and well-being is
also
 important as they make society peaceful and happy.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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