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People often do not interact with their neighbours and this is harming communities. What are the possible causes and solutions?

#people #neighbours #communities
The lesser interest of people to interact with each other indeed brings a restriction to build healthy and co-operative localities. Hectic schedules
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 both adults and children are the prime reasons behind
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 state; 
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, with some initiative to bring people closer can be the answer to the same. Undoubtedly, in the materialistic and contemporary era, students and working professionals remain overly occupied in their schedules,
such
 children usually stick glued with the video gaming consoles or other technical gadgets to remain social; not physically but online, after studies. It leaves no time for them to meet and greet people around them or living in the neighbourhood. 
In addition
 to
this
, there are not enough social gathering being organised by the authorities, where people in the past used to get together, interact, and do respect to one another.
Nevertheless
, there are some sincere steps which masses and regimes can start following to
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 opportunities to bring social harmony. One is that, 
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-togethers, which can convince and influence members to motivate participation. From the view of government, parks and playgrounds should be constructed for children and adults to encourage them to relinquish the comforts of their home and interact with their neighbours. In conclusion, it is difficult to find time for neighbours because of several reasons, whereas still efforts must be made to create a bond as neighbours are like extended family and they are the ones who can offer help in dire circumstances.
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