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Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

#people #exercise #time #health
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It is commonly observed that a large number of people who
work
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 in different organizations are not given much attention to
exercise
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 even in their spare
time
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 so that they face h number of
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 issues. There are two leading causes, lack of
time
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 and a loss of motivation. Possible solutions would be that an employer should set up a
gym
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 in the company premise, and special incentives for those employees who join
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 clubs. One of the reasons that working people do not devote much
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 to
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 as they spend long hours at
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.
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, it is a detrimental effect on workers'
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.
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, a survey has been done by Cambridge University, found that 45% of labours who did not do any
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 due to shortage of
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. To tackle
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 issue, employers should take some steps to install
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 equipment for their employees so that it will be helpful to keep physically fit. Another problem that needs to be considered is the lack of motivation.
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 is because many people do not motivate to do exercises.
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 of leading a busy life or
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 pressures, many people are not just stimulated to go to a
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 or join a sports club.
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, after a hard day of
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, most people prefer just to come home and sit in front of the TV for relaxing, and they do not inspire to join a
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 centre. One possible solution is for employers to consider the
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 and well-being of employees and offers exclusive perks for those who join a
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 club. If
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 is implemented, it would have a positive effect on employee
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 and live a healthy life. To conclude, despite being implications among workers due to lack of
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 and motivation because of
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 commitments, employers need to provide in house
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 facilities and the company should give special discounts or bonus on
fitness
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 centres.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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