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Some people believe that the only purpose of films is to entertain. Others say films should have educational values. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Is entertainment considered to be the only purpose of a filmmaker while making a cinema or he should focus on educative mood?
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 essay will discuss both sides of
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 argument, and will suggest possible outcome. Busy lifestyle and lack of fun activities tend to people considering movies only for entertaining themselves. People all over the universe busy to uphold their lifestyle by working longer hour, and when they get free time they usually go for watching movies which entertain them.
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, they get less family time compared to past, and that reduces fun activities;
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, they choose to watch movies to make up the entertainment. Movies,
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, should contain educational items. Though, with the help of booming modern technology people are becoming
smatter
showing mental alertness and calculation and resourcefulness
smarter
, but they are becoming less ethical persons and
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 less Humanitarian.
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, a research based on a group of men working around the clock suggested, they more or less
does't
does not
doesn't
 really care if someone sick or helpless around them. So, movies should contain
educational part
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an educational part
 as well. In conclusion, movies shouldn’t displayed only for entertainment purpose. It should,
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, contain educational part as well to enhance one's moral values.
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