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Organized tours to remote areas and communities are increasingly popular. What are advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Tourism services are now developing very strongly. Visiting many places helps us to be more open and knowledgeable. There are many popular
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 destinations but nowadays are trips to remote areas or communities.
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 will bring some benefits but
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 many disadvantages. We have to admit that
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 type of tourism has many benefits.
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, visitors can approach and explore the culture of many different localities, expanding their understanding.
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the economy of the local
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 area will be impacted by the positive increase trend. The more visitors the locality has, the more opportunities it has to grow its business and generate significant profits.
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, in a place of interest, management will open performances to convey the local culture to tourists. The entrance fee will be one of the major contributors to the local economy.
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, people can create their income by selling souvenirs typical of the resort.
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, the resorts will face environmental problems. Currently, the phenomenon of
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 groups leaving litter indiscriminately, the sense of environmental protection in the
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 area is very bad. Or many localities are fa
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laces for many adventurers, there are large landfills left by them.
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, many perennial timber trees may be cut down to build an eco-tourism area for tourists. In summary, the local development of service industry will bring many economic be
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benefits, but
ill cause significant harm to the environment.
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, the government needs to have reasonable policies to overcome these negatives.

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