Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others , however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed school.

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People have different views on how their children should be taught in
school
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. Some believe that boys and girls should study in
different
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different classrooms
a different classroom
classroom
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, In my opinion children benefit more from co-education. In many developing countries,
classroom
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of the
school
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, is segregated according to
gender
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.
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, girls and boys study in a different
classroom
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. The main reason behind the segregation of children is to mitigate the harassment faced by girls.
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, as per the research conducted by the Cambridge University states that, in developing countries, the percentage of child abuse in girls is decreased by 40% as compared to
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school
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schools
where children are taught together.
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, the most important benefit of co-education is that it helps mitigate
gender
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discrimination and all the pupil are given equal rights and education. Most of the developed countries have mixed
school
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because of which
teenagar
a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity
teenagers
never hesitate having a conversation with
opposite
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the opposite gender
gender
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.
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, children studying in coeducation curriculum
does not suffer
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do not suffer
from social anxiety as
compare
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compared
to children from
similar
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similar gender classrooms
gender
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classroom
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.
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, in
Newyork
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New york
, in
2008 study
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a 2008 study
from Cambridge University showed that students were more interested in attending a mixed
classroom
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as compared to classes with similar
gender
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.
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childrens
a young person of either sex
children
, from the very young
shows inclinment
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shows, inclement
shows inclement
towards the art and does not require any extra effort or practice.
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, according to
recent survey there
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a recent survey, there
a recent survey there
has been
an
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a
substantial increase in child artist. In conclusion,
although
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seperate
act as a barrier between; stand between
separate
classroom
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help
decrease
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decreases
harassment on girls, I believe co-education
give
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gives
equal
oppurtunity
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
opportunities
to all the children.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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