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Some people think media should be allowed to publicize information on someone's private life. Others believe that media should be regulated in this regard.

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In the world of modern technology, people are increasingly considering how we handle private
information
. We can see the differences in how financial reports are regulated in
law
 by looking at two different forms of companies: shareholder companies and private companies. The
law
 requires that certain companies are transparent in their business operations.
For example
, shareholder companies are required to complete a financial report every year and that
this
 report must be done by a certified
audit
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auditor
 company.
However
, for private companies
this
 is not a mandatory practise and they are not required to publish shareholder
information
. It could be argued that the
law
 is applied unfairly and that some people are afforded a greater level of privacy than others. The
law
should be include
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should include
 a penalty for those who do not comply and in turn
this
 would avoid the media making the issue into a political one. Greater transparency could have a wider impact
in
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on
 it would negate the need for organisations
such
 as Wikileaks from publishing
companies
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company
companies'
company's
information
 under the guise that they are doing so for the good of
society but
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society, but
 when we look deeper we see that they have a financial motivation to publish private
information
.

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