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Being a celebrity - such as a famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

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It is observed that, to be a popular person like a movie actor or an icon in games gives you advantages but, it creates some issues
also
. In the following paragraphs, I will be discussing both of the aspects and will provide my opinion in the conclusion. At the outset, being famous surely provide you respect that you will never have, being a normal individual. You are
then
 important for everyone around you.
For instance
, there is a friend of mine who recently got a debut film. Earlier, he was a junior artist at a theatre, but suddenly picked by a reputed director, and now he is wealthy at one side, but,
also
 gaining love and care from all of his fans, buddies and relatives.
On the other hand
,
however
, there are dangers
also
. It is undoubtedly fine with the money and status, but,
this
 position sometimes lets you to the dark side of
this
 beautiful world. Here, I am talking about the mafia. Its a gang that haunts you for money to give you protection in return. To illustrate it better, let me take an example of my friend again as he was too attacked by these people. My mate was asked to give them five lacks rupees else, they would shoot him
accordingly
. Unfortunately, he had to serve them as per their terms. To recapitulate, I would say that it is obvious, that, the
fame
a contest with rules to determine a winner
game
 provides you an another level of respect and care, but you have to deal with the other threats
also
 that comes along. Well, I think one can bear some risks in life. So, according to me holding a good position or being a celebrity gives you much more benefits than a little problem.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Public scrutiny
  • Intrusive
  • Endorsements
  • Sponsorships
  • Financial security
  • High-profile collaborations
  • Social influence
  • Philanthropic efforts
  • Trust issues
  • Mental health challenges
  • Substance abuse
  • Pressures of celebrity
  • Expectations
  • Disconnect from reality
  • Normalcy
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