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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in 5 different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in 5 different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides information based on
consumer
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 spending on different items in several
countries
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 in 2002.
Overall
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, it is immediately apparent that the
percentage
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 of national
consumer
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expenditure
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 in
food
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the food
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/drinks/tobacco
category
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 held the lion’s share
while
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leisure
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the leisure
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/education
category
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 was the lowest in
allocated
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the allocated
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 budget by all
countries
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 in the given year.
More
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A more
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 detailed look at the table reveals that the
percentage
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 of national
consumer
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expenditure
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in
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on
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 food/drinks/tobacco was the highest in Turkey and stood at 32.14% ,
whereas
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 Sweden was the lowest with
the
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 rate of 16.36% in the same
category
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. Interestingly, the
percentage
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 of national
consumer
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expenditure
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of
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in
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clothing
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the clothing
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/footwear
category
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 was the highest in Italy and accounted for 9.00% ,
while
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 Sweden constituted 5.40%. It is worth mentioning that there was a wide gap between the first and
second
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 categories in all
countries
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. In sharp contrast with
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the
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food/drinks/tobacco
category
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 leisure/education
category
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 experienced a plunge in
allocated
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the allocated
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 budget by all
countries
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.
However
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, Turkey held the lion’s share and made up 4.35% ,
while
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 Spain was the lowest and comprised 1.98% , the
percentage
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 of
expenditure
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 was too close among the figures of
countries
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumer, countries, percentage, expenditure, category with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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