Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same product anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
It is said that countries are becoming similar to each other because of the global spread of the same
product
, which are now available for purchase almost anywhere. I strongly believe that Fix the agreement mistake
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modern development is highly detrimental to culture and traditions worldwide. A country's history, language and ethos are all inextricably bound up in its manufactured artefacts. If the relentless advance of international brands into every corner of the world continues these bland packages might one day completely oust the traditional objects of a nation, which would be a loss of richness and diversity in the world, as well as
the sad disappearance of the manifestations of a place's character. What would a Japanese tea company be without its specially crafted teapot, or a Fijian Kava ritual without its bowl made from a certain type of tree bark? Let us not forget either
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products
, whether these be medicines, cosmetics, toys, clothes, utensils or food provide employment for local people. The spread of manufactured products
can often bring in its wake a loss of jobs, as people turn to buy the new brand perhaps thinking it more
glamorous than the one they are used to. Add a missing verb
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eventually puts old-school craftspeople out of work. Finally
, tourism numbers may also
be affected as travelers
become disillusioned with finding every place just the same as the ones they visited previously. To see the same Change the spelling
travellers
products
in shops the world over is boring, and does not impel visitors to open their wallets in the same way that trinkets or souvenirs unique to the particular area do. Some may argue that all people are entitled to have access to the same products
, but I say that local objects suit local conditions best,
and that faceless uniformity worldwide Is an unwelcome and dreary prospect.Remove the comma
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite