Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same product anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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It is said that countries are becoming similar to each other because of the global spread of the same
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, which are now available for purchase almost anywhere. I strongly believe that
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modern development is highly detrimental to culture and traditions worldwide. A country's history, language and ethos are all inextricably bound up in its manufactured artefacts. If the relentless advance of international brands into every corner of the world continues these bland packages might one day completely oust the traditional objects of a nation, which would be a loss of richness and diversity in the world,
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the sad disappearance of the manifestations of a place's character. What would a Japanese tea company be without its specially crafted teapot, or a Fijian Kava ritual without its bowl made from a certain type of tree bark? Let us not forget
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that traditional
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, whether these be medicines, cosmetics, toys, clothes, utensils or food provide employment for local people. The spread of manufactured
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can often bring in its wake a loss of jobs, as people turn to buy the new brand perhaps thinking it
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glamorous than the one they are used to.
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eventually puts old-school craftspeople out of work.
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, tourism numbers may
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be affected as
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become disillusioned with finding every place just the same as the ones they visited previously. To see the same
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in shops the world over is boring, and does not impel visitors to open their wallets in the same way that trinkets or souvenirs unique to the particular area do. Some may argue that all people are entitled to have access to the same
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, but I say that local objects suit local conditions best
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and that faceless uniformity worldwide Is an unwelcome and dreary prospect.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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