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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are they advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online?

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Nowadays, a technology is notably improving. You can buy anything whatever you want, you can get any
information
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, you can connect to
world
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the world
a world
at
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of
 online. Improving a technology has changed our life and they are obviously useful, handy and helpful. After appearing
internet
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 services,
internet
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fraud
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 to be rampant all over the world, one-click
fraud
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, fake billing, Phone
fraud
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 etc. The customers have to regard about personal
information
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, address, phone number and
information
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of
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about
on
 credit card for not to be taken in by them. A
company
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also have
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also has
 to protect customer's personal
information
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otherwise
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 will lose their trust.
Moreover
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, if the products are not expected for customers, they may return their products and it will need to cost because, the customers
can not
can not
cannot
 try before they buy the products,
for example
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, clothes, foods and machines. Perhaps, the customers may regret after
buy
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buying
 it, they were not expected
color
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
, shapes or advantages. To prevent returned goods, a
company
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 need to promote clearly what they sell with intelligibly descriptions or image.
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, the
internet
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 services have given benefits to us. You do not need to go out for shopping
then
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 you do not need to carry the heavy things or impossible to hold things because you would receive them as a delivery service, you just wait at home.
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, a
company
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have
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has
 a benefit that they do not have a shop. Because, a
company
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 could save costs for
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
, rents and transportations. Some of companies do not need to possess manufactories or factories even space for work. To sum up, despite they have
disadvantage
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disadvantages
 that tend to be taken in by
internet
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fraud
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, using the
internet
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 is indispensable to our life in the modern world. The people have to pay attention when handle to personal
information
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.

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