Should adventure sport banned or not. share your views

#adventure #sport

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Adventure sports are those action sports which

involves

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involve

high degree

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a high degree

of risk

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People tend to perform these activities as they

increases

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increase

metabolism

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physical

extention

a mutually agreed delay in the date set for the completion of a job or payment of a debt

extension

extensions

extinction

and are a bunch of

exiting

creating or arousing excitement

exciting

adventure

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Sports like Skydiving

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Scuba diving

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Zorbing

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Hang Gliding involves

threat

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a threat

threats

to our lives due to being too

dangerous

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dangerous, hence

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should a person give more prime to these sports or to his/her own

life

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On the very

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note these sports should be banned from our society as dangerous sports can cause serious injuries to human

life

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and risking a

life

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just for an adventure is just not worth it

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Human

life

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is undoubtedly precious and god

forbits

command against

forbids

if a person

die

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dies

while having

extreme sports

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an extreme sports

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his family members and relatives will be very disturbed and distressed

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moreover it

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moreover, it

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not good for the society as an earning person or a talented youth has lost his

life

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while playing a stupid sport

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sports teach us Discipline

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morals

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values

etc

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cricket is a decent sports of discipline which teach us teamwork

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sportsman spirit and increases physical fitness

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injuries

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Injuries

are there in these sports but to increase the person’s skills

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Risking our whole career for a sports which provides us nothing is not a

best

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good

option to spend out time

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money and efforts

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challenging sports are done by people who like challenges and

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of pushing yourself in a deep pit

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we can find different kind of challenges in those sports which do not lead to face danger

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as soccer

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basketball

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table tennis etc. Summing up the information we conclude that all those sports having threat or risk of

life

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should be banned

for

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from

the society for not following the basic objective of sports and

life

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should not be risked at any cost because it is priceless.

Wed Apr 22 2020

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