Some people think most crimes are the result of circumstances like poverty and other social problems. Others believe that they are caused by people who are bad in nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Many people thought that big issues of the situation like poorness and other socialist activities,
although
others people believed that most of the family members are poorly reputation by the globe. This
essay agrees with the latter point and will show that the creation does not flow to the men by the natural climate, as the potential change by the social platform used by timely maintained.
It is openly argued that the earth's surface is the most dangerous environment in our world that is
maintained by all individuals because there are many restrictions by the World Health Organization or the health authority services of each country. The world changes with time for hundreds of years, it's different criminal situations for social degradation. For example
, during "COVID-19", many countries have been badly affected and have helped their societies as well as
the health industry. However
, I believe the administration limited its rules before climate change and the human-led Safe Fund began.
On the other hand
, social media provides fake news in recent times as they are always active in these forums and are influenced by false information. Before the climate began, the government announced on social media, that some humanity posts were edited and reposted by misinformation. So, it has a bad effect on people. For instance
, Smartphones are the most important in recent times, most of the time scrolling through Facebook affects families because internet costs are provided by parents. For
this
reason, I believe that our concerns about positive thinking are improved by the limited use and not criticized by any networking site.
In conclusion, although
they are really suffering from the earth's population change they are affected by many families, this
essay thinks that management rules are most important because all our nations follow them and critical mindsets are not criticized by any platform because they are affected by mankind.Submitted by nikhilnath1996 on
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task response
Your introduction should clearly outline both views and your opinion. It currently lacks clarity and does not clearly present the two perspectives in a way that sets up the rest of the essay. Consider rephrasing it for better clarity and structure.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your paragraphs have a clear main idea that is developed with supporting details. Currently, the paragraphs are somewhat disjointed and lack clear linkage to the task’s main question. Each paragraph should clearly relate to one of the perspectives or your opinion.
task response
Provide more relevant and specific examples that directly support your points. The examples you give should clearly tie back to the arguments you are making in your essay. This will help increase the relevance and depth of your discussion.
coherence cohesion
Ensure logical flow between sentences and ideas within paragraphs. Use transition words and phrases effectively to connect your ideas. This will improve the coherence and readability of your essay.
task response
You have a clear attempt to discuss both perspectives and provide your opinion, which is essential for this type of essay prompt.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has an introduction and a conclusion, which help in structuring your response.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?
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