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Online education vs traditional.education Disucc both viwe and opinion

#education #disucc #viwe
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These days
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people spend most of their
time
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 not only in surfing activities
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but
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 on online
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 I agree that online
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 has huge advantage
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I do not think spending on traditional
education
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 is a waste of
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This
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 essay will discuss both views using examples to support arguments and demonstrate points On the one hand
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Technology
has evolving
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is evolving
 and online
education
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 plays a significant role for the people who says "
Time
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 is precious".People even completing their
graduations
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graduation
 from abroad universities through online.
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if E-learning starts in all
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types
 of educational sector
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the air pollution will reduce at the maximum level.Since transportation from one place to another place will be reduced
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people
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People
 learn independently at any
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any place.
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, it is apparent that spending
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 on online
education
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 is a worthwhile for the people.
However
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this
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doesnot
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does not
 mean that the traditional
education
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 should be completely neglected.The traditional
education
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also have
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also has
 an important impact on
our quality of
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our quality time
time
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.
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traditional
education
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 bridges the food relationship between trainer and trainer.As per the survey
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the nature of understanding power has more than the online
education
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 system
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Traditional
education
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 is independent of electricity
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,
laptop or other
electronics
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electronic
 devices which are volatile in nature.Due to the usage of electronics devices for
education
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 purpose that create a way to get addicted to electronic devices sometimes in a wrong way. Seeing the health benefits that some people are encouraging traditional
education
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 too. To sum up
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although
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 there are clear benefits of ensuring
a
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an
 online
education
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I do not believe spending
time
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 on traditional
education
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 not a devotion of
time
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 to a useless activity. In future, both
type
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types
 of
education
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 needed for the society in different environments.
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