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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now “one big traffic jam”. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Over the past three decades the world has witnessed a significant increase in
automobile’s
Suggestion
automobile
 manufacturing. The car has become a vitally important part of life in today’s world, but people should restrict its usage. The increase in car ownership is a result of some factors of modern life and technologies.
Firstly
, automobile usage has steadily risen because the cost of a new car has fallen in real terms so that now it is cheaper than ever to own one.
Secondly
, for the past three
decades people
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decades, people
 have become to earn more money, in comparison with the
last
 century, so that they are able to afford themselves anything they need.
Finally
, some governments under pressure from middle-class car-owners, have poured money into the building of new roads and the widening of existing ones.
This
, in its turn, has contributed (encouraged/caused) to attract more drivers.
For instance
, the result is overcrowding on an
overstretched
 and expensive road system.
Nevertheless
 (
However
), there are some ways that governments (local authorities) should take to make people give up driving their own cars. One solution is to turn parking lots into green parks. The
next
 way to tackle the problem of traffic congestion is to replace cars with bicycles, trams and other environmentally-friendly transports
such
 as electric buses.
However governments
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However, governments
 (authorities) must give drivers the best alternative they can depend on.
For example
, constant delays and unannounced changes to the timetable discourage people from using public transport. The
last
 way to solve the problem is to ban private cars in the city centre.
For instance
, fining heavily drivers who are in areas where cars are banned tends to encourage people to leave their cars behind. In conclusion, automobiles are a convenient form of transportation that brings people much closer to places of work, study and entertainment, but
its
it is
it's
 consuming must be limited to some extend.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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