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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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 given line graph illustrates
emissions
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 of carbon dioxide per person
between
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over
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 4 decades in the United Kingdom,
Sweden
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, Italy and Portugal.
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,
Sweden
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 and
United
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the United
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 Kingdom decreased between 4-12 from
high
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a high
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 point, it can be seen Italy and Portugal increased between 4-8 metric
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tones
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tonnes
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 until 2007. Beginning with diminished countries,
United
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the United
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 Kingdom was in the apex, nearly 11
tones
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 in 1967, after 1967 United Kingdom’s CO2
emissions
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 per person slightly reduced
almost
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by almost
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 8 until 2007.
As
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a
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apply
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second
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,
number
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the number
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 of
tones
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of
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in
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Sweden
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 soared
over
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to over
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 10 and it sharply fell
nearly
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 3
tones
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 in 1987. After 1987, it reduced and stayed below 6 in 2007. In the contrast, Italy and Portugal’s CO2
emissions
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 increased from 0-5 metric
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tones
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tons
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. Italy’s figure almost doubled
,
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 and made it
second
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 highest CO2
emissions
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 country by 2007. Portugal’s
emissions
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 increased
nearly
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by nearly
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 4
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tones
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tonnes
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 by 1987.
After
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this
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 it rose sharply over 5 metric
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tones
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tonnes
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 in 1997. And it increased until to be same
with
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as
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Sweden
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 by 2007.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "second".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, sweden, tones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per person
  • United Kingdom
  • Sweden
  • Italy
  • Portugal
  • graph
  • compare
  • average
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • years
  • period
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