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Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience.

In
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 contemporary era, the
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 consumed in the preparation of
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 has declined and people find it easy to cook
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 because of the semi-processed
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 and appliances available in the market.
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 aspect has both positive and negative implications for the lives of residents.
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 essay will discuss the benefits of pre-cooked
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 and the drawbacks it has on the health of the consumers, in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, nowadays, almost all families have hectic schedules and they rely on packed
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items
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 which they can reheat or cook in a few minutes. Buying
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food
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 saves the
time
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 and energy of the cook and gives them
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 to relax which enhances their energy for the next day.
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, if a person buys frozen readymade chapattis from the grocery store, they just need to heat it in the microwave to make sure it is ready to eat.
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 saves their
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 in preparing dough and making chapattis.
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, they can utilise the saved
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 for relaxing or doing other household chores.
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, pre-cooked
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 offers convenience to the people. On the flip side, there are disadvantages to consuming processed
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. It leads to unhealthy lifestyles and enhances the chances of physical illnesses
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 as cardiovascular diseases and obesity. The prepared
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 is stored in refrigerators and
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 long-term expiries. These foods are not fresh and healthy to eat every day.
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, a survey conducted in Medicity Hospital in India provided that 80 per cent of the total patients were prone to diseases because of high dependence on frozen
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items
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.
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, over-dependence on processed
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items
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 negatively impacts the health of the people.
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, though there are certain pros of cooking frozen
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 in terms of saving
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,
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 trend leads to several health problems in the long run. So, it is important to maintain a balance between fresh
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 and unhealthy
food
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly separate your ideas in different paragraphs. This will help the reader follow your arguments more easily.
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Include more specific examples to support your main points. This will make your argument stronger and clearer.
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It's good that you mentioned drawbacks and benefits, but try to explore each point in more detail to show deeper understanding.
coherence and cohesion
You have a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps frame your essay well.
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The use of examples, like frozen chapattis, makes your argument relatable and easy to understand.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Modern appliances
  • Pre-packaged meals
  • Cooking time
  • Nutritional value
  • Public health
  • Work-life balance
  • Cultural heritage
  • Food industry
  • Processed foods
  • Packaging waste
  • Social bonding
  • Culinary skills
  • International cuisine
  • Preservatives
  • Additives
  • Contamination
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